06.08.2020: From Soldiers, I Flee
- Tay Moe
- Jun 8, 2020
- 2 min read
Updated: Jan 24, 2024
From Soldiers, I Flee
The stomp of soldiers’ footsteps
The bullets going through the crowd
The blood of fresh bodies laying
I can’t see the birds through thick fog
Screams echos in the vast flourish fields
Voices of families torn apart in the mist
The stomp of soldiers’ footsteps
The bullets going through the crowd
The blood of fresh bodies laying
Those that tortured pierce through my heart
Bones laying in a frightened state
I hold on tightly to every hand I can
The stomp of soldiers’ footsteps
The bullets going through the crowd
The blood of fresh bodies laying
My body running, my eyes turn back
Houses scream out burning fire
Animals scattered to ashes of dust
The stomp of soldiers’ footsteps
The bullets going through the crowd
The blood of fresh bodies laying
Branches, leaves, and bamboo all graze me
Through the jungle of deep unknown
My feet cautiously outrun the ground
The stomp of soldiers’ footsteps
The bullets going through the crowd
The blood of fresh bodies laying
Among the strangers, I holler tears
My mind clouded by sorrows
Must move forward no matter what
The stomp of soldiers’ footsteps
The bullets going through the crowd
The blood of fresh bodies laying
Sunsets and sunrises are uncountable
Hungar and fright consume all of me
Crossing the river, how close am I
The stomp of soldiers’ footsteps
The bullets going through the crowd
The blood of fresh bodies laying
Finally, I see the gate
A relief rushes to welcome me
But traces of echo replay
The stomp of soldiers’ footsteps
The bullets going through the crowd
The blood of fresh bodies laying
By Tay M.
Background: The poem depicts a girl fleeing from the moment she sees the Burmese soldiers, to the moment she sees the refugee camp. Throughout her journey, there are three lines of the poem that serve as a constant replay of an image. The poem begins in the middle of chaos when the Burmese came into her village. She is then forced to run into the jungle with strangers. She follows the crowd while experiencing hard conditions. Finally, she sees the refugee camp but her journey remains a mystery. The poem depicts brutal imagery, but many had to cope and live with it. This is a young girl and her story.

I love how frank this one is. That and the repetition make it a very powerful and effective poem. The word choice and phrasing are superb!
Excellent form creating a tremendous impact on the senses. Bravo! Praise God for your gift of writing!!